Archive for October, 2011
The following is a critique done by class mate, Ford Phillips, on my piece:
The piece started out as a picture of a tree next to some long rectangular form. It uses no distortion except for the negative of the photo. It is certainly focused and it has a border made from pieces of the branches of the trees.
The focal point in this piece is central, which is usually a bad thing, but in this piece it works better than it normally would. What helps it out is the border. The border sort of pulls you back into the piece where the focal point sends you out. The border sort of pulls you back into the piece where the focal point sends you out. The border also hurts it. It maybe a little too dark and almost blends in with the right side of the piece, making border and piece indistinguishable from each other. Maybe if it were greyer, or even grainier, that might help. The images and cuts themselves put the piece at risk for being boring since they lack variety, yet the actual composition is rather various, and has almost too much variety; there is, however, a good sense of balance with it being bilaterally symmetrical. The cuts also seem a little haphazard and random. If there was a sense of echoing with the three shapes cut from the negative picture, then it might flow better as a whole. Also, it also makes good (and literal) use of positive and negative forms, which adds to its balance, but, again, there is too much in the composition for it to be nicely economized.
The picture was nice and simple, making for a nice possible composition. In the end contrast and economy are what killed it. It was rather expertly crafted and makes for a nice idea.
In the collage Assignment we were faced with the problem of making a composition using repetitive copies of the same image. A minimum of 8 Xerox copies of a single black and white photograph that we’ve either found or taken ourselves.
This was my original image. A picture i took in my 11th Grade photography class with a Panasonic Lumix DMC-FZ50:
The picture involves a bridge that actually connects nothing. Its a deserted bridge found in the heart of east end st. Thomas, initially built to create a highway but was abandoned in the middle of its project phase.
I made at eight copies of it with different alterations such as:
- negative image
- bouncing it on the xerox bed
- spining it on the xerox bed
- exact copy of the image
- zoom at 200% to the bottom of the image (grass)
- zoom at 200% into upper half of the image (the tree over the bridge)
- mirror copy of the image
- +2 on contrast
From there, i proceeded to cutting out from each xerox copy to put them together and create the composition. I initially approached this with no preconceived idea in mind. All i really knew was that i wanted something that looked like “organized randomness”. Here is the final piece.
The following is my critique of my assigned piece on critique day for our collage projects:
Looking at my assigned piece, I must say I do like it. This piece would b the perfect example of exceptional use of repetition and variety. The uses of these principles of design are the strongest things in this piece and are used very cooperatively. The repetition of various elements of the design (such as the woman, the balls/balloons, the car, and the walking man) is very present, but what makes the piece stand out is the variety of size and placement of these elements. The placement and size of the different elements of the piece is also what creates the rhythm in this piece.
When I look at the piece, it seems to me that the focal point is the full figure picture of the woman in the lower-right hand corner of the piece. From that woman, the piece makes my eyes go around the entire page in a circle in a very interesting way. My eyes leave the woman, move to the assortment of balloons, then up to a picture of the same woman but from the waist up, then over to the man walking (which is copied 3 more times but gradually getting smaller, causing my eyes to move down the piece in at a faster pace than when I was looking at the rest of the piece), then basically jump over the “flattened” picture of the woman (which is not the same as the original picture of the woman because this time her shape was cut out from a different part of the original picture used to make this piece), then goes to the vans (copied 2 more times gradually getting smaller with each copy, moving my eyes at a faster rate than the rest of the piece right back to the focal point). The reason I find the rhythm of this piece so interesting is because at first, the motion and path your eyes should follow isn’t strong and you actually see the one connective path as multiple pathways.
In the repetition grid assignment, The first thing we were asked to do was to find 2 shapes and make one take a bite out of the other. keep in mind the day we were asked to do this we basically had no idea what the assignment was. All we were asked to do was make 50 motifs (2 shapes, one taking a bite out of the other). The next day in class we picked one of our 50 motifs and made a 1” x 1″ and 2″ x 2″ version of it. Each version was photocopied and we were asked to place them in various ways on a 10″ x 10″ grid (we drew in class that same day). This is when things got interesting. my chosen Motif was the outcome of a square biting the top corner of a triangle (as implied by the title). I didn’t not have all 100 1″ x 1″ pieces when i started to arrange them on the grid. so i went to work with my 2″ x 2″ pieces. I initially came up with 2 designs with 2 variations of each.
I found it amazing how with only rotating one tile, you can change a whole section.
The option i chose was the design in the lower right hand corner. It reminds me of flowers falling form a tree and had something about it that interested me. From this step, it was time to move on and start the inking, but before inking the design on the illustration board we had to sketch an inking plan and a re-sketch of the design on tracing paper, to be transfered to the illustration board.
(left: Inking plan, Right: Re-sketch)
With the finished re-sketch, we next had to turn it over onto the illustration board and release the sketch (release the graphite from the pencil in the lines of the sketch by scribbling on the back of the tracing paper with the design face down on the illustration board) onto the illustration board so that “guidelines” are produced. Once the guidelines are on the illustration board, we traced over them with a technical pen and followed the inking plan on which shapes and spaces to fill with India ink.
(Almost finished inking on the illustration board)
After the inking process, looking at my design i still felt like my design was missing something. I decided then take advantage of the option to make a border around the piece. I wanted something that would enhance the piece without being too busy but still very intricate and creative. I decided to cut into the border, creating shapes that are or could’ve been created in the design.
(finished design with almost finished border)
Now, what i want you to understand is that illustration board is the hardest thing I have ever cut!!! I ran through more than 10 X-Acto knife blades and had to do 15 or more slices per line just to make the cut outs for this border.
Monday, October 3rd was critique day. we were instructed to make a cover slit to protect our designs before turning them in. Here is the finished product:
(upper: finished product, lower: Finished product with cover slit)
After critique i only find that my biggest issues with my designs are craftsmanship. guidelines that haven’t been erased, overhang on pieces that should’ve been cut off, and slightly rough edges are areas that i have to improve on.
I found the videos to be very entertaining and informative! I enjoyed the fact that the concept explained in the first video (Tim Brown: The powerful link between creativity and play) was both practical and fun. The idea of having and using fun to not only enhance the creative process but enhance the way adults work with each other is a beautiful and effective one! The second video (RSAorg – Changing education paradigms) was my favorite because it put things like why education is becoming more and more unattractive and ineffective in a way that makes a so much sense.