Jack and Jill
As introduced earlier, the exercise was to take the Jack and Jill nursery rhyme and interpret it into another story and then illustrate it in six panels.
The original rhyme:
Jack and Jill
went up the hill
to fetch a pail of water,
Jack fell down
and broke his cfown
and Jill came tumbling after.
The group made a new rhymefor the new story:
Jack dragged Jill
Right up that hill
To throw her down the well,
With a quick whack
Jill broke Jack’s back
And now it’s Jill’s story to tell.
The six panels were pasted on blackboard in a horizontal line, with small rectangles holding the verses underneath.
A few words about group projects in general:
Group projects are usually found to be pretty hard as they require considerable more time in regards to meetings, also requiring more planing as to the exact project and division of the project. One of the hardest things with group projects, however, is that while one party may have and put into the project all the enthusiasm and perseverance they can muster, another party may not care what the outcome of the effort really is, or may not be trying to do their best, wanting only to pass the class.
Fortunately, this particular group for this project was able to work well together, planing ahead and dividing up the work well. In the end, however, it seems that if one want to have a really successful project, they should steer away from the group, which is more of a social meeting, and work on their own.
Critique Notes:
- without words story a little confusing
- craftsmanship good, but some lines not straight, eraser, pencil
- good negative & positive space
- used pretty much all symbols
- interesting ending
- simple?
- wishes for more complexity
- a line to follow
- different symbols together making one shape
- a lot of repetition & variety both
- diagonal lines bringing eye through
- placement of things makes thing repetitive
- split first layout in half (3 and 3 instead of 1 long)
- last panel confusing
- entire piece plays on entry of “not entirely sure whats going on”
- makes you wnat to stay and figure out
- stronger without words?
- hard to understand without words
- [viewer] could probably get close to story without words
- different hills [going up & on top]
- Jills arms same
- Jack’s arms different?
- everything [all symbols] in Jill’s shadow – good!
- Jack’s shirt hard to figure (in fourth)
- Jack’s shirt not consistent
- last panel concept really good, visually not as great